Comments for page "RPC-282" Posts in the discussion thread "RPC-282" Tue, 09 Mar 2021 07:28:24 +0000 (no title) Mon, 20 Apr 2020 13:25:51 +0000 TheGreatTarbolin69 4318134 The "Bone Fragment" thing seems like it could use some more sauce, as a new reader to this GOI would have no idea what the fuck is going on.

Thanks for fixing the grammar btw, but remember to always proof read your articles before posting, keep working on upping your interview game and you might have something good at hand.

]]> (no title) Mon, 20 Apr 2020 02:25:25 +0000 BallYT 3702925 Forgot this part when I posted this, so this is late but thanks to JimmyBoyHahaJimmyBoyHaha and DrXOUBLE DDrXOUBLE D for the crits

]]> (no title) Mon, 20 Apr 2020 02:23:21 +0000 BallYT 3702925 Fixed most of things you stated, though a few things I didn't change

While it would not instantly accelerate to a quick speed, whales can already move at a speed which would be considered fast so a larger whale would have a larger fluke to push itself faster. So it could definitely move fast.

The location off of China is required since it is was made somewhere off the mouth of the Yangtze river. Potentially could spiral into a conflict with PCAOO if they were to discover it, but that was not something I wanted to be a focus in the article.

TIn the ending where the power cuts off, it is meant to hint that the bone fragment had the capabilities to cause the power failure, as the Kin have often myseriously caused equipment failure in the past and I wanted to designate that ability to the bone fragment that they've used for other purposes in other articles instead of it just being a random thing that happens. Don't know of anything I could edit in to make that more clear but if the bone fragment becomes its own article it'll have a crosslink so there's no confusion.

]]> (no title) Sun, 19 Apr 2020 23:40:21 +0000 JimmyBoyHaha 4981794 Ball stop rating your own articles 5 stars >:0

]]> (no title) Sun, 19 Apr 2020 22:08:10 +0000 TheGreatTarbolin69 4318134 Hazards:

I'm pretty sure this anomaly falls under the sentient

Containment Protocols:

OL-Site-067 has been established in the waters surrounding RPC-282.

On an island? Floating? Kinda like a oil extracting station? Could be more specific here


in which case RPC-282 will flee rapidly before eventually returning to its original position.

How does a motherfuck half the size of a skyscraper move at any speed closely related to "fast"? And where does he go when he flees? That sounds like an important bit of information.


RPC-282 was first located in the East China Sea 82.3 kilometers off the coast of Shanghai

Going anywhere near China is a really bad idea, and one that wouldn't make the Chinese goverment nor the PCAAo very happy, sounds like the start of a conflict of interets.

several vessels belonging the Cetace's Kin were noted around RPC-282's position

Belonging to* i recomend running all drafts and articles in a grammar checker before posting as it saves times from having to find (or hope someone else finds) mistakes and fixing them.


Individual is noted to be moving there hand throughout the inside of a blue cloak they were wearing

Their hand* again, make sure to double, tripel, quadruple check fro grammar errors before posting.

The interview fell, odd? Kinda rushed and unnatural, the ending was also a pretty heavy Deus Ex Machina.

Overall thoughts:

I like the idea, the execution could be better an the grammar could a hell lot better, there are also some very heavy reperating of words throughout the article and it could use some spacing.

3/5 its ok, may change the rating if some of the present issues are fixed