The two subsequent drafts included much more substantial amendments: the first in a late August draft by Lord Milner – one of the original five members of Lloyd George's War Cabinet as a minister without portfolio – which reduced the geographic scope from all of Palestine to "in Palestine", and the second from Milner and Amery in early October, which added the two "safeguard clauses".
As seguintes versións incluíron varias emendas substanciais máis: a primeira delas propúxose a finais de agosto por Lord Milner –un dos cinco membros orixinais do gabinete de guerra de Lloyd George e ministro sen carteira –quen reduciu o alcance xeográfico de toda Palestina a simplemente "en Palestina"; a segunda foi tamén de Milner xunto a Amery a comezos de outubro, engadindo dúas "cláusulas de salvagarda".