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Neal was educated in local public schools., upon outbreak of the American Civil War in 1861, the 15-year-old Neal attempted to enlist in the Union Army but Neal's father refused to Neal's his permission.
Neal was educated in local public schools and, upon outbreak of the American Civil War in 1861, the 15-year-old Neal attempted to enlist in the Union Army but his father refused to give his permission.